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FL: TMfN, Chapter 2

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Felarya Legends: The man from nowere

Chapter 2

"... What... the...?"

All my ciggies and the lighted one fell to the ground as my hand suddenly went numb, and my mouth opens wide.

...

"No... it doesn't... make sense"

Needles to say, I was confused as hell.

"... What... what..."

"WHAT THE HELL IS THE MEANING OF THIS?!?!?!"

Remember I told ya' the plan was to enjoy the rest of the night? Well, forget it.

I just got transported to a fucked-up episode of "The Twilight Zone".

There was I, standing with my 80's clothing, my bandana, and my wallet in my pants, in the middle of a nowhere...

Nowhere??? Yeah...

A FRIGGIN' FOREST!!! That's right. I am standing in the middle of a FOREST.

And for those who think I meant some cheap Forest Gump pun, you're dead wrong.

Get this: I was smoking a cigarrete on my house's backyard, and in a blink, I'm in the middle of a friggin' forest!!! How the hell would you react???

Luckily, I kept my senses (most of them anyways) and tried to think for a viable explanation.

"Well, it couldn't been the aliens, it couldn't been Bush, and it DEFINITELY couldn't be Antonio Banderas..."

Yep. Didn't worked. At least I tried.

All of a sudden...

KRASH!!!

A tree WAY behind me just flew above me and landed 10 meters in front of me. An 8-meters long tree just flew above me.

I turned back in a haste. Something was coming in my direction...

RUMBLE!!! RUMBLE!!!!!!

"FUCK, FUCK, FUCK..."

And it was BIG.

RUUUUUUMMBLEEEEE!!!!! KRASH!!! KRASH!!!

2 more trees pass me by... it looked bad.

Now, I may be a man, but I'm intelligent too.

Inmediatly, I looked for a place to hide. A downed tree... "that will do the job".

I ducked behind it and waited as the sound grew louder.

"Good god, what the - -- ?"

Then I saw them.

2 girls, with the whitest and palest skin I have ever seen in my life and with dresses covered in jewels, were running with a haste I don’t see every-day. One of them is crying, and the other one is praying, while grabbing the hand of the crying one and forcing her to keep running, almost dragging her.

“Why are they runnin - -- ?"

My question is cut short as I see “IT”.

“If I’m still in Monterrey, then I just went insane”

A giant “creature” just passes me by, pursuing the other two "running" even faster… I guess. Why do I guess??? She doesn’t have any legs. She??? Yes, she was a woman… I think. But she DIDN'T HAD LEGS! She was a half-snake, by crying out loud!!!

Just tell me, which was the last time you saw one of those???

She’s was so friggin’ fast I barely noticed her long golden hair.

“... Ok, I'm insane"

IIIIIAAAAHHHH!!!!

The half-snake creature got a hold of one of the girls. She looks at it with a cute face like is she was playing with a Barbie doll of sorts.

“NO!!! NO!!! LEEME GO!!!” yelled the little girl.

I was afraid. Very afraid. To begin with, I WAS IN A PLACE WERE 60 FOOT CREATURES EXISTS!!!

“Holly shit!!!”

She toys with her a couple of seconds, the little girl still screaming her lungs out, and then... then...

She puts the little girl on her tongue, toys with her a little more, and...

GULP!

I watch as a small, helpless bulge goes slowly down her neck…

“HOLLY FUCKING SHIT!!!”

She ATE HER!!! THE HALF-SNAKE THING JUST SWALLOWED THE SCREAMING GIRL IN A SINGLE BITE!!!

“Help me…” that’s the last thing I heard… faint as a whisper…

The creature pauses and rubs her belly during a few seconds, looking very content, then decides to resume the chase. She went into the forest and dissapeared, making loud crashing noises in the process.

“What… what the fuck just happened??? Were the hell am I?”

This was, definitely, not my day. Without a doubt, I was in the middle of some deep shit.

"Damn..."

TO BE CONTINUED
Cernex's comments: Dang, I'm all sentimental thanks to Chrono Trigger's soundtrack playing right now on my WinAmp... give me a second...

*sniff*

Well, this is the second chapter (duh...), and as you can notice, our "hero" (if you can call him that) is already in deep trouble. But enough about that...

I've always been the type of people who thinks that a story needs the perfect (at least, the most possible level of perfection) on both action, and plot and character development. A story with too many of only one of those is destined to "fail" (in a certain level, that is... I'm also the kind of people who thinks that all stories and novels will always have its fans, not mattering how "bad" or "good" are they, critically speaking).

As you can see, in here, the first chapter was "all" about character development (pretty basic stuff, if you thin about it), but in the second chapter, we have all this characters, all this situations happening and dveloping around the main character in such an upbeat and unexpected way...

On a perfect world, the perfect math would be "one chapter for plot development, and one chapter for action sequences only", but its not a neccesity. Still, for me, having that "equation" as the basic idea for a story's construction has always worked with very good results.

And credits for the most "graphic" details go to the man, Karbo, himself. I only laid it pretty simplistic, but he came up with the "it" that made the scene special.

Also, I guess I need to talk about the project a little bit more... were was I???

Oh yeah...

As I already said, the project started "fully" with me "note"ing Karbo with a very small introduction were I tried (and failed, I think, ;P) to summarize my ideas for a story.

But "The man from nowere" (which wasn't even named back then) didn't started there. At first, were I was just having the first ideas for the story, I posted some minor "hints" on "comment" forms in some Karbo drawings, and I actually started to get serious about it (because, you know, writting a story with a character that isn't yours is always serious buissness) was when Karbo actually ANSWERED my comments (doesn't happen often in this community) and actually showed some interest in the story (which happens even LESS).

I don't know in what drawings I exactly posted the comments, but you might be able to find them if you search REALLY carefully, ;P

Anyway, after seeing that Karbo was interested about the story and all, I "note"ed him with the introduction, and he liked it (apparently, :) )and, for me, that was the green-light I needed.

Shortly after sending him that introduction, I sended him the first couple drafts, and so on...

More info. next chapter (which will hit next monday). Stay tunned.

El Cernex
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Foule
I loved the emotion that you've displayed in this part of the story... it's so the reaction a ordinary persona would've had in the first place... unlike a certain charatcer I've made for a fiction of mine... (I can't upload it here though... since I'm not too sure as to how to upload them here... and NOBODY has told me oherwise...) Still, I loved the atmosphere in the second part... carries alot of impact in this one. ^ ^